I don’t know who copyedited The Day-Glo Brothers, but I like her style. She found some good stuff — misplaced commas, literal inaccuracies (e.g. it was people lit by black light — not black light used by people — that guided planes down to landings on aircraft carriers), even an unintended double entendre. Whoops.
But I can pick nits with the best of them. Consider my reply when she added “Monthly” to the end of “Popular Science” so that it would match the name I’d used for the magazine in a reference earlier in the story:
By 1953, when the magazine featured an atomic blast rendered in daylight fluorescent ink (!), Popular Science had minimized the “Â“Monthly”Â” part into a tiny little font on the cover and the table of contents page and dropped it altogether elsewhere.
So there. And yes, folks, this is what it’s come down to. Next stop: a review of the manuscript by a color expert at the Rochester Institute of Technology.